ingilizcesi ii olan baksın bi

son finally cümlesinde because of this yerine relative olarak whose kulllansan daha iyi olrudu

@21 eyv panpa

1. they tried to cloning ships, and were successful about that however it HAD lived only six years.
2.i watched tv that they WERE changing babies’ dna, and CREATING perfect soldiers.
gördüklerim bunlar panpa başka bişey çarpmadı gözüme

@23 eyv panpa

i watched tv that olmaz ı saw a documentary on tv, itwas about ...

panpa hızlıca bir geçtim üstünden. hafif uykuluyum, yoksa elimden geldiğice düzeltirdim. ama şunu söyleyeyim. noktalama hataların var, zaten bunu ana dili ing. olanlar bile ayırt edemiyor bazen. onu geçtim. pek akıcı gözükmüyor, basit zamanlar kullanmışsın. ve tekrar yapmışsın. bir de "lots of" gibi kalıplar kullanmaktan kaçın essaylerde. bunun yerine "numerous", "a large number of ... " gibi kalıplar kullanman dilini daha geliştirir. ama bunların hepsi bir bütün tabi. sana zaman ve biraz da synonym çalışması yapmanı öneririm. ama levelına göre vocabulary'in iyi.

like yerine as a koy panpa 2. satır

scientists are trying to find out new things continuously, especially in the field of medicine because it is about human health. they have cured lots of diseases, but there are lots of diseases waiting for cure, like cancer, aids etc. i hope, they will make new medicines and new treatment ways. i have some idea about this.

first of all, they will make artificial organs so they can change all organs that have problem. they tried to clone sheep, and were successful about that however it has lived only six years. normally it should have lived twelve years. following years, they cloned many animals such as horse, cow, cattle, and cat. nowadays it is not allowed to clone human but it can be possible in the future.

moreover, these days’ scientists can see your dna, and they can guess your health when babies are at womb. maybe 50 years later, they will have cured all diseases for unborn babies, and they will change babies’ dna. i watched a program on tv in which they were changing babies’ dna, and created perfect soldiers.

furthermore, robots are being used in some operations by doctors as they used it in a heart surgery last year. i hope, they will use robots for all surgeries in the future. it is healthy.

finally, technological developments are great, but it can be problem for ecological system. because of this we should use technology under control

Az biraz düzelttim. hepsini düzeltsem senin yapmadığın anlaşılırdı panpa

@26 eyv panpa buraya koyduktan sonra da baya bi hata farkettim bende biraz daha düzeltmeye çalışcam

@27 eyv panpa
@28 eyv panpa çok yardımcı oldu geliştirmeye çalışıom gibimde deil kimsenin çakıp çakmaması

Bunu kim okicak amini dengesini gibtigimin manyaa