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+1About fiveteen years ago, while ı was at primary scholl, i was living to best part of my childhood. it was phenomenal. I guess ı was eight. There was a girl named iremsu. We can call that girl my childhood's love. i liked talking and joking with her. So ı really loved her.
At those times, one day, ı was watching her while she was playing a game with her friends. And ı decided to talk to her with my very innocent thoughts. So ı went to her and ı said " ı would like to tell something to you" she just said "tell". But my tellings were long so ı said to her that; "would you like to go canteen? We can speak while we are eating our bagel." she accepted that. We went to the canteen and ı told to canteen staff what ı want. When ı took the first bagel ı gave it to her. And ı started to waiting for mine. Then ı took mine too. I tuned back and I was shocked because she was gone. I looked arround for a while and I was shocked again. I saw her. She was eating my simit with kaya they were very sincer. it was like a earthquake for me. But I couldnt do anything. I went to the classroom and cried while eating my bagel. Still it wasnt tasty ı dıdnt like it.(Son cümlede ne demeye çalıştın panpa?)
Maybe the day was not a good day but I've learned something that day: "Don't trust anyone without knowing". Yes ı cried on the day but I am laughing it now.
Dipnot:Panpa grammer hatalarını düzelttim, fikrimi sorarsan basic ingilizce olmuş ama derdini anlatır.Bir de simite benzer amerikalıların yediği birşey var bagel diyorlar, yabancı birinin okuyacağını düşünerek anlaması açısından simit yazan yerleri bagel ile değiştirdim.
Edit:Ulan muallak o kadar okudum düzelttim insan birşey der amk. -
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+1..but I've learned something that day..
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+1I have learned something that day. Cümlesi doğru gibi geldi okuyunca ama haklı olabilirsin,ne olması gerekiyordu?
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+1I learned something that day
olacak panpa
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başlık yok! burası bom boş!